This week, Trifecta asked for this:
Exactly 33 of your own words about love gone wrong. But we’re asking that you not use any of the following words:
love
sad
tears
wept
heart
pain
This is what happened:
He remembers.
Inside him
A blank space no longer filled
Oceans lapping at the coast of his soul
Outside, a smile
Forced, hard as smashed hope
Empty eyes belie the words he scatters
Natalie Amatera 
Sadly, that is how it is shown to the world many times. Well done….
Thank you 🙂
You convey the heartbreak well, with wonderful imagery (love the coast of his soul phrase.)
Thank you!! It’s strangely liberating to be denied the usual suspects of the lexicon!!
Loved this line, “Oceans lapping at the coast of his soul”.
Thank you 🙂
Enjoyed this bereft description….as much as anyone can enjoy emptiness, that is.
Haha thank you! Enjoyment is in the eye of the beholder, I think.
Love the layers here. Heartbreaks are so cruel…
Thank you. I adore layers and they’re sort of my specialty… 😉
Heartbreaking… really
I shall take that as a compliment of the highest order –
Tack, Björn!! 🙂
So sad.
“A blank space no longer filled…” swoon.
Wow, I’m not sure anyone has swooned over my scribblings before!!! I’m extremely flattered! *blush* 🙂
Well done.
Loved the line, ‘Oceans lapping at the coast of his soul’
Why thank you 🙂 that line does seem to be a favourite! I was happy with it, I must say 🙂
This describes heartbreak so well. It sucks to feel this way! Well done!
Thank you! 🙂 a broken heart is surely the most painful of fractures, and the slowest to heal…
Cool, another sea shore. You hit the mark. Very well done.
Aha, thank you 🙂
Such great imagery here. Such an emptiness fro the loss of love. I particularly liked the ocean line.
Thank you kindly 🙂
The reference to the crashing ocean was a heartfelt reveal of a missed opportunity. I loved the ability of the smile.
Thank you! It’s a true pleasure to have such thoughtful and articulate comments 🙂
I have to agree: “Oceans lapping at the coast of his soul” is FABULOUS!
Wow, I never expected so much love for that line! Thank you so much for letting me know you appreciate my work 🙂
Gorgeous. I wish I’d written that line about the oceans. Wonderful piece from start to finish!
Thank you! I’m immeasurably glad everyone liked this one so much!! 🙂
This was well done. I especially liked these words, “Outside, a smile
Forced, hard as smashed hope.” Oh, wow, they touch the heart or should I say the “heartbreak” :~)
Thank you very much 🙂 yes one must often force a smile to hide what’s going on inside. Like the song ‘smile though your heart is breaking’…
I love the metaphors.
Thank you!! I’m a sucker for metaphor myself 🙂
Great work here
Thank you so much 🙂
Absolutely beautiful. Both of these lines are breathtaking:
A blank space no longer filled
Oceans lapping at the coast of his soul
Oh thank you so much, I’m very pleased you like it 🙂
Excellent imagery and such a gorgeous line,”Oceans lapping at the coast of his soul”!
Thank you 🙂 that line was a resounding success!!
🙂