Crash – you fell into my life
Bang – my heart thudded faster while I was flying
Until
Wallop – I had to hit the ground
Splash – tears fall as I descend
Snap – my heart breaks
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Natalie Amatera 
This is clever. I like it.
Thanks, Ann 🙂
This one is my favorite so far. Maybe because I am a hopeless romantic. I felt each emotion of it.
Snap…that’s exactly what the sound of a dream and a heart breaking sounds like.
have a good weekend
Thank you, Kir 🙂 I too am a hopeless romantic… Still hoping! Lol
Falling in love can be hazardous to your health. But it can also be an exhilarating free fall 🙂
Hear, hear!
I feel like I hit warp-speed, smack-dab through this relationship. Like a ride at the amusement park – fun & dizzying. Don’t worry – it didn’t make me want to go hurl. 😉 Great piece!
Lol thank you. Feels similar when you’re living it!
Ouch. That final line — “snap” — was an interesting choice for the sound of a heart breaking; it actually did make me flinch a bit.
Great use of onomatopoeia! 🙂
Thank you. Well, that is the sound it makes. (Crackle and Pop don’t normally come into it.)
This was spot on as to how it works. Snap was a great choice. well done.
Thank you 🙂 onomatopoeia, despite being a difficult word to spell (especially when my ‘smart’ phone keeps trying to correct it. Wrongly.) is one of my favourite literary devices. I also like a good simile. But that was another story.
Great use of the onomatopoeia to express each line!
Why thank you, oh great editorial personage 😉 I enjoyed this prompt.
Ha! Wonderful and energetic! Well done Natalie! 😀
Thank you, Linda… That’s a huge compliment coming from you 😀
Excellent.
Thank you 🙂
Creative and enjoyable!
oh,, SNAP! nicely done
Sad and enjoyable read, especially the snap… yes indeed very good.
Thank you Björn, that’s what I was aiming for 🙂 glad you liked it.
Hearts should come with some kind of protective gear. Thanks for linking up!
That they should! 🙂 a pleasure, as always..
I love how you relate each emotion through its own sound. Great job!
Glad it was a, er, smash-hit…. 😉 thank you
Love the step by step progression here:-)
There’s a reason they call it falling in love. Nice romp.
Beginning with a crash and ending with a snap…very nice. Ah, l’amour. 🙂