He Remembers the Goodbye (Trifecta)

This week, Trifecta asked for this:
Exactly 33 of your own words about love gone wrong. But we’re asking that you not use any of the following words:

love
sad
tears
wept
heart
pain
 
This is what happened:

He remembers.
Inside him
A blank space no longer filled
Oceans lapping at the coast of his soul
Outside, a smile
Forced, hard as smashed hope
Empty eyes belie the words he scatters

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41 thoughts on “He Remembers the Goodbye (Trifecta)

  1. This was well done. I especially liked these words, “Outside, a smile
    Forced, hard as smashed hope.” Oh, wow, they touch the heart or should I say the “heartbreak” :~)

  2. Absolutely beautiful. Both of these lines are breathtaking:
    A blank space no longer filled
    Oceans lapping at the coast of his soul

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